Meni "The" Monet

Daphna, can I have your attention for just a second?

2010-12-14T09:57:00.000-08:00

Hey, I recoreded a song for you yesterday night. Click Play.

Internet or Not?!

2010-11-03T23:21:00.000-07:00

Living in the 21th(ww. - 21st century) expoes(sp.) you to some of the greatest inventions humanity has ever known - The internet. Over the years, since 1960, when the Internet was intrepidity(phr.) in the American military, it has became(gr.) the most influential and ground breaking invention of the last century. Recently, there have been opinions claiming that this wonderful creation is worthless.

On the one hand, the internet allows you to combine business in your private life. For instance, the E-mail, gives you the possibility to communicate with your clients when you are not in your office. In addition, the internet is known by the humanity(ww.) as the largest libary we have ever known. Every tiny piece of material is available in(ww. - on) the internet, what(ww. - which) makes the internet what makes it(מיותר) the perfect place for you to broden your horizones.

On the other hand, there has been (a) suggestion that in a few years, students will not study in classes. They will use chat videos - a cutting edge technology which enable(gr.) a student to speak directly with other students or teachers while seeing them. It simulates an actual conversation without the need to be in a(ww. - the) same room. It is important to remember that replacing teachers with computers necessarily means limited options (in) terms of teaching modes. This is to say, computers can not modify the teaching process to fit the student.

In conclusion, using cutting edge technology like(the) internet is a wondefull thing. However, it is important to know when to stop using it. In my opinion, It is fine and even necessary to use new technologies at(ww.) this century, but we have to be aware to(ww.-of) virtual dangers. That is to say, I suggest limited hours in a day for usuing the internet(phr.).

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Daphna

Bagrut exams

2010-09-12T15:21:00.000-07:00

For the past few years the issue of Matriculation exams are(ww. - as) the most reliable way of testing a student's knowledge, has been debated in many levels, such as teachers and students. Recently, there have been opinions claiming that this way of testing is worthless. I personally believe that the Bagrut exams are not the most effective way of testing students.

First of all, there is the most known argument, which simply claims that the Bagrut exams "stresses out" the student. This leads them to mistake(phr.) during the test. There is no proven claim that the Matriculation exams make students to get into panics(phr.), although, most of the pupils that have just finished the exam claims(gr.) the test was very stressful among others of(phr.) the material they have to study and the time they (have) to accomplish that.

Second of all, most of the teachers tend to say that the Bagrut exams are the most reliable way of testing a student's knowledge. This, in my opinion, is wrong, since the student is demanded(ww. - required) to remember 200 pages for 3 hours of testing, (which) is really ridiculous. A research that was published in Ynet showed that after a period of time after the test, in other words(מיותר) one and a half week(s) after the test, most of the students do not remember most of the material they learned.

To conclude, I suggest the education system to find a different way to examine the students' knowledge. A kind of test that will test the students not only theoretically, but practicaly as well. This will help the students to remember the material for a long period of time.

Better.

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Daphna

Sport Or Not?

2010-09-12T11:24:00.000-07:00

Two days ago, while I was reading this magazine, I read an article and as a part of the article the writer asked the readers to express their opinion on the issue which some people prefer team sports while other prefer individual sports.(phr.) I personally think that team sport is preferable in this case.

On the one hand, it is important to mention that team sports develop different kinds of abilities, such as team work, since the players have to work in cooperation, (pay) attention to the whole team because during a game, some players use to mistake(phr.). For example, in a football match, the striker tends to loose the ball as a result of stress. So, as a player in his team, my duty is to keep the ball away from the opponent.

On the other hand, individual sports develop a lot of skills, which team sport does not. for example, the issue of self discipline does not appear in team sports such as football and basketball. In addition, there is the fact that in the individual sports, each game is important for the players' respect(ww.) - The more you win , you are a better player(phr.).
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To conclude, you can see that it is not about a better kind of sport, it is all dependent(phr.) on what kind of player you are. For example, you can be the greatest soccer player in the history of sport. But as long as you can not work in a team, you are worthless compared to a middeled(ww.) player who works (well) in a team work.

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Daphna

Why don't you correct your work?

2010-05-08T03:44:00.000-07:00

3 Bar Ilan st.
Holon
24 April, 2010

Yale University
5 liana Street
New York
USA

Dear Sir / Madam,

I am writing this letter since I am interested in applying to your university. More specifically, I am interested in your music program called "Music for all".

I would like to study voice training and to become a part of your exiting Philharmonic orchestra. I understand Yale has an excellent course in "Broadway performance". Although, this is a important program I believe I will fit in and benefit from it.

I am currently studying at Kugel High School and I will be completing my studies in about two years. On top of being an excellent student, I have been a musician for most of my life. I play the guitar and I have performed in a Musical high school version of "Hamlet". I am confident that being a part of your music program will contribute to my musical education.

I will be grateful if you can send me more information about your program as well as additional details such as fees, duration of the program and any other relevant information. Thank you for you assistance. Looking forward to hearing from you.

King regards,
Mario Luigie.

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Daphna

See the World

2010-04-16T08:55:00.000-07:00

3 Bar Ilan Street

Holon
April 16, 2010

Ms. Lola Berry
Manager
"See the World"
6 Bobo Street
New York, NY

Dear Ms. Berry,

My name is Mario Luigy, I am 17 years old and I am currently studying at Kugel High School. I am writing this letter since I am deeply intrested in the idea of a trip to the US. I used to guide groups as part of my volunteer work. Furthemore, I had the opportunity to be part of a pioneer project called "Taglit", where I was a guide. Therefore, a trip with "See The World" would truely be a wonderful opportunity for me.

In a case where I will be accepted to your tour to the US I would be intrested in visiting The White House, The Washington Monument and Capitol Hill. As you can see, I am inrested in a politaclly - orriented type of tour.

Nonetheless, High costs and expences might impair my efforts to join the tour. As a result, I would greatly appreciate information about hotels' costs, travel expencese and other general fees involved.

I am running out of time so I hope to hear from you as early as you can. Moreover, I would like you to know that I am looking forward to my Trip.

Kind Regards,
Mario Luigy

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Daphna

2010-04-07T22:27:00.000-07:00

3 Bar Ilan Street

Holon

July 2, 2006

Station manager Office

1 Mota Gor Street
Holon

Dear Sir / Madam,

I have heard your radio station plans to produce a series of one-hour programs for teenagers. You have asked teenage listeners to send in their suggestions so I would like to suggest my idea for a program.

If you are wondering why my program should be realized on your radio station, I am sure you will be surprised to know that, as a teenager, I understand what the teenagers want to hear and learn. First of all, my program will focused on teenagers' problems. Problems we face almost every single day, such as arguments with the parents, problems with the boyfriend and the girlfriend and the biggest problem we face, which is Love. Second of all, I will dedicate 15 minutes in every program to homework problems. The listeners will actually be able to make a phone call to the radio station and ask their question and by the program I will try to help them.

There are plenty of reasons why the subject of my program is important and why other teens would be interested. For instance, all the teenagers have similar problems, so after helping some of the teenagers, I will know for sure what will help them. Furthermore, I know for sure how to deal with love problems. I have experienced many disappointments, so I know the answer to every little problem they will ask me.

To conclude, I hope you take my suggestion under consideration. I believe my program will help the teenagers all over the country and I am sure the program will be a hit on your radio station.

I want to thank you for considering my suggestion.

Sincerely yours,
Mario Luiejy.
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Daphna

Gadna Week

2010-03-03T22:33:00.000-08:00

A few weeks ago, eleventh graders in my school came back from the Gadna Week. It took place at Sde Boker, in the south of Israel. The Gadna Week simply prepares seventeen year old teenagers for their military service. In a general look, I truly enjoyed the preparation for the IDF and this experience was unforgettable.

Our Gadna week was divided into four parts, which included team work, chores, training and classes in military theories. Nevertheless, they all had several things in common, such as keeping times. Generally speaking, keeping to a tight schedule allows one to be organized. It also helped me feel in control, since I knew exactly what to expect. For example, breakfast was at 6:30 am, lunch was at 12:30 pm etc. Another exciting, but rigorous, feature of army life was the training. I liked the challenging training because it helped me understand what is expected of me in the army. For example, doing well in the physical training part proved to me that I could do well in the Infantry Corps.

Yet, the unique army experience includes getting used to army hierarchy. Through the Gadna week, every team had a tough commander who told them what to do in every situation. This made me feel small and powerless. As a "soldier", I felt like an insignificant, helpless and superfluous part in a much larger system. This was because I felt like I could not resist them.

To conclude, the experience as a whole is recommended and worthwhile. The Gadna helps us understand the significance of the IDF and the importance of everybody's contribution to it.

Excellent! (and nice picture!).

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Daphna

UK Travel Agency

2010-02-10T22:45:00.000-08:00

3 Bar Ilan Street
Holon
July 2, 2006

Manager's Office
UK Travel Agency
1 Mota Gor Street
Holon

Dear Sir / Madam,

It has been a tradition in my family to go on a vacation every summer. This summer, two weeks ago, I took part in an organized tour on my last vacation. I expected to have a graet time but instead, I was disappointed. I wish to complain about the vacation you had recommended and the misleading information we got.

First of all, I would like to express my disappointment from the hotel you have chosen. The service was bad, the meals were unsatisfactory and the rooms were dirty. In addition, our articles were stolen while we were at the small swimming pool. It can be said that your hotel was not as good as what you led me to believe.

Second of all, I would like to express the opposition I feel about the guide we got. He was very impatienced and moody. For example, whenever my sister asked him a question about the sites we saw, he got upset and started yelling on my sister. Furthemore, I could notice that his explanations were not comprehensible although he tried to interest us.

To conclude, I sincerely hope that you will take action to correct the issue. I hope that you will change the information in your website inspite of renovate that hotel, an action that will cost a lot of money to execute since a new pool, the materials etc, cost a lot of money together. As a result of this case, I would appreciarte a refund.

I look foward to your reply.

Sincerely yours,

Mario Luiejy.

Please correct your work!

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Daphna

Cyber Angels Organization

2010-01-27T22:31:00.000-08:00

15 Tzvi Frank Street
Rishon Le Zion
March 4, 2010

The Manager's Office
Cyber Angels Organization
41 Seaview Street
Netanya

Dear Sir/Madam,

I would like to join your voluntary organization called "Cyber Angel". In our digital age, it's becoming incredibly common. Many people all around the world have been victims of cyber crimes, such as stalking people in the chat rooms. Like you, I want to fight those crimes and make sure the victims are safe.

If you wonder why I believe that I am suitable for "Cyber Angels" I am sure you will be surprised to know that I have been a victim of the criminals that we are talking about. They keep on bother and harass me. Inspite of give up to those criminals, I found out about the Cyber Angels organization and I am glad you helped me.

I believe that I can contribute to the organization because of my experience in computers. I like to spend my free time on the computer.I had five points in computers Bagrut Exam. Furthermore, I spend a lot of time on the computer and I know many things on this subject.

In my opinion, the goal of the organization is very important and the problem of this harassment on the internet is a very important issue. Therefore, I would like to do the best I can to help in the attempt to stop this phenomenon.

I hope to hear from you soon,

Sincerely yours,

Mario Kuba.

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Daphna

Virtual Classes

2010-01-13T14:14:00.000-08:00

For the past few mounths the issue of virtual classes has been debated in many levels, such as teachers, parents and students. In this new way of studying, students have the opportunity to learn the material from the internet, instead of the traditional frontal lessons of learning in the class. Recently there have been opinions claiming that this new way of studying is worthless.

On the one hand, learning through the internet gives the student an opportunity to learn at his own personal pace, since most of the learning is done by the students with the teacher's guide. This improves the student's ability to understand the material more effectively. Furthemore, if the pupil does not understand some of the reading material, he can write an e-mail to his teacher and ask for help.

On the other hand, the virtual classes make the most important objectives provided by school's student - social meetings. At school, the pupils learn how to contact others but sitting in front of the computer all day long harms the student since this way the student does not develop any social skills.
In addition, this new program has economic problems. There are many families who do not have a computer. They will have to buy a computer that costs a lot of money in order for their children to study.

To conclude, I believe this new form of learning is very unique and special since it has never been tried before. However, I think that this new way of studying should not replace the old and good way of studying which includes learning with other students in the same room with a real teacher.

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Daphna

Trip to Poland

2009-12-02T22:37:00.000-08:00

3 Bar Ilan Street

Holon

July 2, 2006

Mrs. Gilat Simon

Principle's Office

Hayim Kugel School

Mota Gor 1 Street

Holon

Dear Madam,

For the past few years, it has been a tradition on this school to go on a trip to Poland with the intent to strenthen our Jewish heritage and to better acquinte ourselves with our Jewish history. However, one problomatic issue is the high price.

There are several reasons why the high price of the trip constitutes a problem. First of all, in addition to the high rate, we also have to pay for the school trips we have during the year, which most of the rime are very expensive too. Also, it is important to remember thatr we are talking about high schhol students that can not help their parents to pay those prices, since most of them do not have a job.

(Why haven't you completed this letter in your blog? You were supposed to copy your written letter, which I checked, into your blog....)

Daphna.

George Stoyonovich

2009-11-04T22:23:00.000-08:00

If you have read the story "Summers Reading", you must know George, the main character. George Stoyonovich, which in German means remains in one place, is twenty years old . He is a young man who dropped out of school when he was sixteen since he did not like people to tell him what to do. Along the story George goes into mental and ethical changes.

George Stoyonovich is a poor 20 year old neighborhood boy who lives in a poor New-York neighborhood. Since George dropped out of school, he finds it very difficult to find a good job, that can grant him good money. George does not go out of his house often and most of the time he spends staying in his house, cleaning and reading his older sister's magazines. His sister is the closest person George has ever known. She is the only one that really works in the family and earns money and from time to time she gives him a little money so he can buy himself something. George does not have a mother because she died when he was very young and his father does not function as a role model like a father should function.

Stoyonovich has a lot of problems. on the one hand, he has social problems. Stoyonovich has no friends. He is very shy and most of the time he avoids talking with people. Every night he goes out of the house and stars walking in the streets. On the other hand, Stoyonovich has a lot of personality problems. He is very lazy and immature. He is very impatient. He becomes sick of every thing he does very fast. Despite his problems, at the end of the story he undergoes a tranformation and starts reading books, some thing he had never done before. This change happened thanks to the help of The Change Maker , Mr. Cattanzara. He is the only one who shows interest in George's life, except for his sister, Sophie. Mr. Cattanzara entrenches in George some common sense that without education he will not succeed in his life.

At the beginning of the story, I did not think George could undergo a tranformation. I did not see George as a person I could identify with. I, unlike George, am not a lazy person. I have always worked hard to achieve my goals. Therefore, this character is very important to me, and the ending of the story, where George does bring himself to change, has left me with a smile of contentment. However. I started to like George at the point where he showed interest in education. Therefore, at the end of the story when George undergoes a tranformation, I find him to be very much like me and this is the reason why George is my favorite character in the story "A Summer's Reading".

Very good work, although it's a bit too long for an essay.

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Daphna

Marley & Me

2009-10-21T23:33:00.000-07:00

I have recently read a book called "Marley and Me: Life and Love with the World's Worst Dog". This book is a New York Times bestselling autobiographical book by journalist John Grogan, that was published in 2005. generally, I really love this book for the reasons it is funny(phr.) and this is a must-read for anyone who has ever loved a pet. Marley & Me, however, is for more than pet people. I recommend it for anyone who enjoys a good story.

John and Jenny Grogan, a new caple(sp.) that(מיותר) (had) just moved from the brutal Michigan winters and relocate(gr. - use the past) to a cottage in southern Florida, where they are hired as reporters for competing newspapers. At The Palm Beach Post, Jenny immediately receives prominent front-page assignments, while at the South Florida Sun Sentinel, John finds himself writing obituaries and two-paragraph articles about mundane news, like a fire at the local garbage dump. John's friend advises him to adopet a dog to see if they're ready to raise a family. Than(sp.) came Marley. Marley is a yellow Labrador Retriever. Marley, a wiggly yellow furball of a puppy who immediately proves to be incorrigible. They bring him to Ms. Kornblut, who firmly believes any dog can be trained, but when Marley refuses to obey commands, she expels him from her class. Marley continues to wreak havoc on the household, providing John with a wealth of material for his column, which becomes a hit with readers and helps increase the newspaper's circulation. Jenny becomes pregnant, but loses the baby early in her first trimester.- This very long paragraph has to be divided into two seperate paragraphs.

In my opinion this book is an amazing book that, as I said, every(ww. - any) one who loves pet(s) should read. So Yes, there are plenty of dog stories or pet sroties if you want to read, and yes, Grogan contends that there is a lot we can learn from our pets. The story is, however, so honest and well-written that I believe it will resonate with pet lovers and pet-deprived people alike.

Clearly, you haven't used you own words and style for the most part of this essay, and that's too bad. it is your writing that I want to read. It's fine to look for help in various sources of information, but using it throughout your whole essay is not right.

Daphna

Food Manufacturers

2009-10-10T10:48:00.000-07:00

For the past few years, nutritionists like Alice Brown has been claimed(gr.) that people need to be more responsible for what they eat and to eat more healthy food, such as vegetables and vitamin supplements. Alice Brown sais(sp.) that there is a definited(gr.) connection between people's behavior and what they eat or don't eat. This leads us to the question, whether food manufacturers sould(sp.) be held responsible for producing healthier food, or not.

First, I personaly think that manufacturers sould(sp.) not be held responsible for producing healthier food since the food that the manufacturers producing(gr.) is legal and they have the right to produce this food. Furthemore, avoiding(ww.) the manufacturers from producing their food can leads(gr.) to an aconimical(sp.) problems(gr.) and social problems as well, such as separation the social(phr.) into two classes and more.

Furthermore, People have the right to choose what to eat. The fact that there are people that should eat more healthy food, such as vegetables and vitamins, can't avoid us(phr.), the other consumers, to eat and buy the food we like to eat. In other words, I believe that people that want to eat healty(sp.) food sould(sp.) buy a(מיותר) special food for them and sould(sp.) not abstain(ww.) us from having variety of food(phr.).

In conclusion, I believe that blamming the food manufacturers for producing (a) selection of food(s), that includes unhealthy food is wrong and not necessary. In addition, I suggest that all the people that want to eat healty food sould(sp.) have a special schedule(what?) that includes the food they can eat from the tremendous food selection.

You have quite a lot to correct. Please read my remarks and correct your work accordingly.
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Daphna

A letter to a editor

2009-09-21T11:15:00.002-07:00

4 Buber Martin Street
Holon
September 19, 2009

The Editor

P.O Box 457

Tel Aviv

The article that I have read "Israel - The leading in the Cancer of the lymph gland" and had published in "Ynet" deals with the problem of the lymph gland Cancer, specially in Israel . The level of morbidity in Israel by Cancer of the lymph gland, also known as Hodgkin lymphoma disease, amongst young people is one of the highest in the world. The approximated reason for this Cancer is late exposure to childhood diseases such as Measles and Infectious mononucleosis.

Hodgkin lymphoma is a terrible disease that, unlike other types, affects also young people between the ages of 15-35. This issue makes it more tragic since young people are also at risk. Personally, I am scared because this disease more common among men. Therefor, I believe that it's important to pay attention to your body, and if you feel pain in your neck, armpits or other parts of your body, go to the doctor!

In my opinion, in the 21^st century we must make in a point to find a cure, not only to Hodgkin lymphoma, but to all kinds of Cancer. Furthermore, parents must be aware of the fact that Cancer doesn't happen to all people.

In conclusion, being aware of the risk, keeping a healthy life style and visiting the doctor regularly may insure your health at any age.

Yours Truly,
Meni Monet

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Daphna

Cancer

2009-09-21T11:15:00.001-07:00

The level of morbidity in Israel by Cancer of the lymph gland, also known as Hodgkin lymphoma disease, amongst young people is one of the highest in the world. The approximated reason for this Cancer is late exposure to childhood diseases such as Measles and Infectious mononucleosis.

Hodgkin lymphoma is a terrible disease that, unlike other types, affects also young people between the ages 15-35. This isue makes it more tragic since young people are also at risk.

Personally, I am scared because this disease is more common among men. Therefor I believe that it's important to pay attention to your body, and if you feel pain in your neck, armpits or other parts of your body, go to the doctor!

In my opinion, in the 21^st century we must make in a point to find a cure, not only to Hodgkin lymphoma, but to all kinds of Cancer. Furthermore, parents must be aware to the fact that Cancer doesn't happen to all people.

In conclusion, being aware of the risk, keeping a healthy life style and visiting the doctor regularly may insure your health at any age.

Link to the article : http://www.ynet.co.il/articles/0,7340,L-3777529,00.html

Very good, but, again, where is the link to your essay?

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Daphna

Are you fat?

2009-09-21T10:31:00.001-07:00

It may seem like the right thing to do! A very rotund child goes through Adjustable gastric band surgery. This child goes to loss tens of pounds and gains quality of life and health. However, recently there have been opinions claiming that in Israel they are rushing to operate children and teens, without considering the effects of the surgery on the children's growth and development.

In my opinion, adjustable gastric band surgery may seem like a drastic move for a teenager but it can be a positive decision. It can help fat teens from being embarrassed when they go to school. In addition, this surgery will reduce their appetite which means, in other words, they will eat less and be more healthy.

Being thin all my life, it is difficult for me to relate to those children's situation. Still, I can understand how it is to be different. Therefore, I can understand their desire for "a magic fix"; being overweight means everybody can see how different you are.

In conclusion, I believe that while this move in beneficial it has to me done with parental guidance and with the help of a psychologist in order to make sure that those children are making the right decision for the right reasons.

Link to the artical: ----

Good work, although I can't see the link to your article.
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Daphna
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School uniforms

2009-05-16T13:15:00.000-07:00

School uniforms have been around for decades. However, throughout the years this issue has raised many questions in regards to it's pros and cons.

When duscussing the issue of shcool uniform, one must first relate to the social agenda behind it. School uniforms are ment to disguise and social and economical differences, making everyone look alike. Also, on a personal level, the school uniform can save time in the morning, that would other wise be dedicated to thinking what to wear.

However, school uniforms can also restrict you and limit your personal and individual taste in clothes. Teens often need to express their individuality and making them wear a school uniform can undermine this. Furthemore, schools that wish to encourage their pupils to think independently cannot and should not force a dress code. Personal choise begins with how you choose to present yourself to the world, and when you have to cover it up with a uniform it is like wearing a mask or a disguise.

To conclude, the school uniform might be beneficial when it when it is designed for young children like those in grade school, but for pupils in high scool it causes more damage than good. In my opinion school uniforms should be restricted to grade school only.

Very good essay. Well done!
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Daphna

Burge McCall

2009-05-15T03:00:00.000-07:00

Mr. McCall was a short, heavy - set man with a loud voice. He put a(מיותר) grease on his hair and prefume on his handkerchief. In addition, he had a habit of sucking his teeth with his tongue and making a peculiar sound(too many insignificant details). Mrs. McCall was a tall, thin woman with black hair and big black eyes. She always wore her hair parted in the middle and smoothed down on each side. No one knew why Mrs. McCall married Mr. McCall. Some said she married him to get away of the Santa Fe railroad engines.

The couple had a bad marrige in which Mr. McCall used to call his wife names and generaly be very stingy with her. Mrs. McCall, on the other hand, did not respond to his name calling that, in turn lead Mr. McCall to slap her across the face. This slap was the turning point of the plot. Mrs. McCall's reaction was calling her husband "a big rat", telling him he would regret it some day. Later on, Mrs. McCall acquired rat poison in order to kill "a big rat". After Sled the seller told Mr. McCall about his wife and the rat poison, Mr. McCall changed his behavior and started to be kind to his wife(Explain why).

In conclusion, these events lead to a happier relationship in which Mr. McCall only(מיותר) spoke nicely to her, taking(gr. - took) her to (the)movies and (to) picnics etc(מיותר). In my opinion, this relationship was strange from the beginning and very unclear. While reading the story I couldn't shake the feeling that something bad was going to happen but i was extremely surprised to read the ending. I believe Mrs. McCall was very smart and crafty by causing her husband to change his behavior with nothing more than an illusion(what illusion, please explain more clearly).

It's good, but some of your statements need further clarification.
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Daphna

HomeWork

2009-02-26T02:59:00.000-08:00

The 11 year old Ben Berrafato, has raised an interesting question regarding the value of doing homework. According to Berrafato, homework is another form of slavery, since it is given without the students' permission, and therefore, homework should be against the law. Berrafato's claim present the issue of whether it is necesary to give student's homework or not.

First, homework gives you the opportunity to review and reinforce the studies material.
Several studies have shown that in order to really internalize a fact it must be reviewed over and over again. Furthemore, doing more practice can give you more confidence, in terms of understanding the matirial. Finally, doing homework is a chance for the student to see if he has difficulties in understanding the different subjects he is learning in class.

To sum up, homework is not such bad thing for the student because it reaforces his knowledge and his understanding. In my opinion, I would suggest that teachers give homework but not too much because, after all, students need some free time.

Well done! It's short, but very well put. (95)
Daphna.

Space exploration!, or not?

2009-02-20T02:56:00.000-08:00

Since the late 1950's and (the) early 1960's the question of space travel and exploration has been debated. As technology developed, the issue whether to go out into space and spend so much time or whether to stay here, on eath(sp. - Earth) and explore earth has been interesting(gr. - interested) the researchers for a long time.

On the plus side there are advantages to space exploroution, such as searching for knowledge and expanding the bounds of the human experience. Furthemore, the search for knowledge may improve the quality of our lives like, for example finding water on other planets.

On the minus side(On the other hand) , going into space is a terrible waste of time, money and human resources because the spaceship's take-off needs a lot of fuel which cost(gr.) a lot of money . In addition, traveling to space is very dangerous and may risk human lives. For example, the late astronaut Ilan Ramon who lost his life in the 2003 delegation called "Colombia". Moreover, what's the point in space exploration if there are so many things we have not explored yet on Earth, such as finding new anergy (sp.) sources, a cure for Cancer and AIDS, or finding a solution to global warming.

In conclusion, I think that the main question is why not keep on exploring life on Earth instead of space. However, space exploration is important and so I suggest to explore space without risking human lives by sending robots that can explore the(מיותר) space.

This is better. Good work! (90)

Daphna.

What would you do in a situation like peer pressure?

2009-02-05T04:59:00.000-08:00

Most teenagers are exposed to a social phenomenon called peer pressure.
Peer pressure usually stems from a(מיותר) moral questions of either doing what you think is right, or doing something your peers pressure you to do(into doing).

Whether the peer pressure results in drinking alcohol, smoking cigarettes or cutting classes, teens give in to bad behavior because they want to be like their friends, to look "cool" or to fit in. Others give in to peer pressure because they are afraid that other kids may make fun of them in a(מיותר) case they won't go along with the others.

It is possible to resist peer pressure and say "no". Paying attention to your own values and emotions can help you to know what is the right thing to do. Also, you can choose your friends carefully and try to be near people who don't pressure you to do things you know are wrong.

To sum up, I think that although peer pressure is a social manifestation that may happen to all of us, it's important to stay calm at this moment of the pressure(phr.) and to think what will occur if you will (no "will" after "if") say "no", or in case that you will(מיותר) just walk away. I believe that every one of us can escape the situation of peer pressure..

Now It's a great essay. Well done! (95)
Daphna.

The War In Gaza: Life is not about how hard you can hit

2009-01-07T09:51:00.000-08:00

Do you think you know how it is? Feel. Try to feel. Come on, Just try.
You can't. Can you? Do you know why? This is because you have no idea how it is to be under Katyusha rockets for 8 years! You don't have any clue how it is to feel that no ones care about you! You have no idea!
Nobody in Israel wants it to happen, but we have no choice!
The Hamas thinks it is tough, and it thinks it can keep hitting us. But it's not about how hard you can hit. It's about how hard you can get it and keep moving forward. But we had enough of this!
So now? Well, now is our turn to hit.
Don't you ever judge us! Ever, until you feel it yourselves, and I hope you won't.

Letter From Meni to Mani

2008-12-21T11:57:00.000-08:00

Sunday, 12.21.2008

Dear Mani
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Hey, how are you?
I haven't written to you in ages - things have been hectic.
When I had read your last letter, about how you fell into the mud in front of all your friends, it reminded me of an amusing story of my own.

It all happend when I was 4 years old and my 2 sisters and I decided to bake a chocolate cake. My eldest sister told me to get the oil from the cupboard above the kitchen sink. But, because I was very small and weak, when I held the oil bottle I fell backwords. The oil spilled all over the floor and I was covered with it. My sisters tried to help me but they couldn't. And every time I tried to get up I slipped and fell back on the oily floor. Finally, my sisters gave up and started laughing.

I hope my story made you laugh and I want to hear your thoughts about this story. Do you think its funny? Do you like it? Do you know a similar story of your own?

I'm looking foward to hearing from you soon.
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Yours,

Meni.

Winter & Summer in Israel

2008-12-06T03:28:00.000-08:00

Winter is one of the four seasons of the year.
Its the season with the shortest days and the lowest temperatures.
In northen areas it snows during the winter.
In winter the hours of the nights are more dominant and in most areas its characterized with the largest amouat of precipitations.

In terms of the psychological aspect, winter is seen as changing people's mood and habits. Furthermore, Winter is viewed as a symbolic season especially in art and in the media, signifying death or local of hope.

In the Israely realty winter lasts for 3 mounth but it is not as cold or snowy as in Europe and North America. In Israel, druing winter, most of the plants and fields like the Groundsel, the Cyclamenm, the Oxalis and the anemone flourish.

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Summer is one of the four seasons of the year and the hottest one of all four.
Some people see summer as the mounths July, June and August.

The weather in summer is the wormest and in some of the subtropical areas it is also a wet season - which, in other words, means it rains a lot.
During the season, most of the plants die and the fields take on a yellow color instead of green.

The Israeli summer is extremely hot and it is the season when children and students go on their summer vacation.

In the past few years, as a result of the global warming, summers have become hotter and hotter. But for now, children still enjoy the pool and the beach during those hot days.

My summer vication

2008-11-13T03:12:00.000-08:00

In the summer of 2008 I went with my family to the lovely and ancient city - Tiberias. Tiberias is a city in the north of Israel near the Kineret.
Although many people think that Teberias is a sleepy little town, there is plenty to do.

Teberias was founded in 20AD and was called after the Roman emperor Teberios.
So, for those of you who live history, Teberias has plenty of historical sites that can teach you about the vast and magnificent history of the Israely people.

However, if you are looking for atractions - like me, you can enjoy Snepling, Hiking, or just lying by the pool. Whatever you do, make it a point to notice the intresting and lovely view of Tiberias.

In my point of view, the vacation to Tiberias was fun, intresting and relaxing. I found out that there is somthing for everyone in this wonderfull city and I recommended you to visit it.

My big sister

2008-10-09T11:52:00.000-07:00

This is my second post in my new school blog and today I will talk about the most important person in my life.

The most important person in my life is my sister; Oshrat Monet.
Oshrat is my second big sister and she is two years older than me , so in fact I know her all my life and we know everything about each other. It's not a bad thing when you have a great big sister like mine, because Oshrat teaches me a lot of things and helps me in many things like homework and problems with my friends.

In about five months Oshrat will be recruited to the army and I'm really depressed about it because when it will happen(gr.) we won't spend our free time together but I'm sure we will find a solution to this problem.- divide this paragraph into 2 sentences. This sentence is too long.

And now, in a sharp twist, I will tell you a little bit about my sister. As I wrote before, Oshrat is my big sister and she is older than me in two years and a half , which means that she is 18 years old. She has brown eyes and a black hair.

Nowadays she is working in a coffee shop that is called "Coffee Coffee" and she wants to be a psychologist. As all my sisters, Oshrat also studied in the same elementary school and high school. In addition, she really likes animals, especially dogs and lions, because in our house we grew up in a way which we are supposed to love animals.(phr.- We were raised to love animals).

I have so many things to tell you about this wonderful sister but I can't because i have just 4 paragraphs and this is my last one. To sum up, the only thing I can say is: Take care of your family, because it's the best thing that could ever happened to us.

Meni, you have some work here. Please correct your work again.
Daphna.

Meni Monet - What do you really know about this man?

2008-09-18T03:06:00.000-07:00

This is my first post in my new school blog, and for some reasons I have to present my self.
My name is Meni Monet, I'm 15 years old and Im a student in 10 grade just like most of you. I have a lovely family, that includes my parents and my 3 sisters.

I'm a very athletic man. In my free time I like to run and to practice on a very intresting sport calls "Parkour". I really like martial arts like Ninjitsu, Kong - Fu, Boxing, Jiujitsu and Wrestling.
in addition to sport, I like Music like Rock, Pop, Hip Hop, Rap and I like to dance Brackdance, Hip Hop, Poping and Waving.
If you are wondring and if you are thinking to your self: "What about studying? doesn't he like to study?"... so actually i like to study, but only things that i find them intersting like Mysticism, Magic, Medicine and Communication.

I have a lot of friends and we like to have fun, as I said before, i like to play Parkour. Pakour is an activity with the aim of moving from one point to another as efficiently and quickly as possible, using the abilities of the human body. Pakour is is more fun when I do it with friends.

My school is a very nice place and in the school I like the classes, my friends, the girls and the breaks.
The subject that i like the most is Sport. In the Sport class I like the Basketball games, the Runing tests and the Acrobatics parts.

There is nothing else to tell you besides my expectations from this year.
I don't have so many expectations from this year, but my big expectation from this year is the success. I want to succeed in the Mathematics classes and in the English classes and i hope this essay will help me in my success.